Writing: Lollies

We are looking at describing what we see using compound and complex sentences.

R12	Connections
Hosana	I love lollies but I can’t eat too many. Lollies are so yummy when I’m happy. Lollies are so delicious unless their fresh. I can see a mix of lollies they look so yummy.
Layla	These lollies are very sweet but i can’t eat them . Because my mum told me i couldn’t .My mum is nice and awesome as a purple unicorn.
Adia	Absent
Keelee	Lollies are delicious but they can make you sick.I allowed lollies although they make me sick.I wish i could have lollies all the time.when I see lollies I jump with excitement.
Yashvi	Those lollies look delicious and colourful but my mum would not let me eat lollies. Lollies taste more better when I feel happy.Whenever I see lollies my mouth shivers with excitement.
Avara	I can smell M&M but i’m not allowed to eat them.They are so randomly colorful after seeing them on the screen.those lollies taste so good when you taste them.That sprinkliy look makes me wait awhile so i can eat it.
Tania	I eat lollies when I feel happy. I have lollies at home yet I can only eat a few. The lollies are colourful. Very colourful. I just want to grab them but on the other hand, their on a screen so I can’t.
Brooke	These are very sour lollies and very sweet. Sweet and delightful lollies are on the table they are delicious,there is an amazing after taste after eating the lollies.
Ana	those lollies look tasty don't don't like lollies
Adelaide	I love lollies and they are  delicious andcan'tand can't ito many and most of the lollies are yum too have you do not have to eat them .
Jessica	These lollies look delicious but i can’t eat too many. The lollies look awesome and delicious. The lollies look hard but it’s still delicious. Most of the lollies are chocolates but if I eat too much i get sick. Lollies make me hungry whenever I look at them. Those lollies looks good and delicious. Sour lollies makes my mouth tingle. My tounge feels itchy after eating sour lollies. My mouth leaks saliva and excitement before i see the sugary lollies. My tounge has a color after i ateM&M's& M’s. Inside my mouth drools before i try the lollies. I like lollies even though i hate some. I drool with excitement because lollies cheer me up. I have to eat lollies other wise i will miss out on them.
James	I sometimes eat lollies because they give me a little bit of energy. My favourite are probably the lollie worms but my mum won’t let me eat that much lollies. There so many lollies but it’s too bad nobody can eat them. I like all the lollies ececpt licorice.
Chris	There is M&Ms and things that look like Maltesers. The lollies look yummy as well as sugary.
Dylan	lollies are nice when it isint sugery but mabey for people it could tast nice it isint nice for me,  but i like chocolate sometimes  when i have to match chocolate i feel so sick aiso lollies sometimeslollies
Daniel C.	I like M and Ms when I am hungry.I don’t eat lollies very much because is so sweet.I will eat those lollies until i get sick.The lollies is sweet but is still delicious.
Hanif	I like Lollies and i love m&ms.And things that like chocolate with nuts on  them .I like the round thing that have the spiracle on the top of the round stuff.Went i ate the chocolate and its feel so good.
Tu Ariki	lickrish is sweet and good.m&ms are colorful and delish.i like to eat chocolate. but if i eat too much chocolate i get a little sick.
Tristan	Licorice is nice but it is so sweet.Chocolate balls taste sweat, crash when  walk to school , I eat lollis when i am at home,The  sprinkle fish looks nice and i want to eat it,I like m and ms and I Want to eat it so badly
Luka	my eyes go all over the place when i have sour lollies but thats why i like it. when i eat lollies which doesn't really happen i nibble it.
Samuel	There are different kind of lollies  and  they look  so delicious. These  lollies look like they have lots of sugar if they have sugar that means they are not healthy. Lollies can make your teeth durty.
Arnav	There are amazing lollies along with lollies that have a sweet and bitter taste when you eat them. Lollies are mainly different colours like it is a mini rainbow made of lollies. My tastebuds shiver with excitment when the beautiful taste of M&M’s touch them.
Jonathan	Lollies a delicious but its too sweet. I like to eat M and Ms when I see it. I like lollies when I’m hungry. I don’t like lollies when I’m full. Those rainbow lollies are full of sugar but if you eat too much its not healthy.
Wynstan	Lollies are sweet  when they are fresh. Lollies have different tastes because of how they are made. when I see the lollies that is when my stomach rumbles. my mouth drolls when I can see all of those lollies. My eyes blick two times to see if it see if it is real.
Darius	I can see one of my best loving lollies in there and I feel like it right now at school. I like m and m’s when I’m happy but when I’m mad I don’t like them at all.What are those rainbow things on the top of the m and m’s because if they are sour I will cry so bad so please don’t give it to me otherwise I will cry And you don’t it when I cry cause when I cry I get very very angry at people and story.Also they are all very nice and delicious but the sour one’s are very yucky.
Harvies	Lollies meke my teeth rotn and lollies are set put I like lollies
Daniel S.	I love lollies but I can’t eat them all the time. One of my favourite lollies are there but i can’t eat it  very often because they have to much sugar. Sometimes I run into the dairy and buy some  when I walk home from school. I love them when I’m happy but when I’m mad I wont touch them.
Kaleb	those look delicious but not healthy.that looks like too much when I feel like a full stomach.looks like a rainbow when.
Maria	I could see a mix lollies that makes me want to lick the screen. I know I shouldn’t have them but they are irresistible. The lollies are both rough and smooth. The lollies are colourful as if they were the rainbow. I can imagine how they would taste in my mouth. Sweet. Sour. Delightful. They are so close but yet so far……… I want some. Why can’t I have some?

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